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HaikuWriMo Feb. 09 by ~singsorrow:iconsingsorrow:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Haiku & Eastern




1.
even hotter,
summer fires
cut power

2.
fried eggs -
my bare feet on
concrete

3.
sun bleached sky,
clouds blend
seamlessly

4.
sailor's sky,
bloody sight -
warning? delight?

5.
open window,
wind blows summer
into air-cooler

6.
walk to school -
new shoes are
torture

7.
unfortunate spot,
cat asleep before
armchair

8.
walk-to-school track
after holidays
weeds

9.
seeing double
moon-image on
metal

10.
streelights
at war with
stars

11.
chocolate sky,
teeth gritty with
dust

12.
smoky haze,
bushfires across
the border

13.
glass shards -
rocks crowd
windowsill

14.
throbbing
an ant bite
travels

15.
gunshots
trigger-happy
gamer

16.
sunshine,
trees dry
to dust

17.
pitter-patter
droplets on roof -
sprinkler

18.
too early
for breakfast -
cat meows

19.
cold-change,
a wardrobe
unprepared

20.
holiday planned,
the forecast:
rain

21.
sailing boats
in a gutter
overflowing

22.
morning galahs,
retching vocals -
wake up

23.
dust travels
before storm,
mud rain

24.
sunburnt -
mum's new
flowers

25.
pigeons
on a powerline -
tightrope

26.
blowfly -
wrong side of
flyscreen

27.
car window
wide open in
dust storm

28.
easter-eggs
at post-Christmas
sale
©2009 ~singsorrow
:iconsingsorrow:

Author's Comments

So it's that time of the year again - HaikuWriMo!

I'm probably going to confuse some people with this, seeing as everyone else will probably be writing winter themed haiku. Living on the other side of the world, it's really hard to write about cold when it's 40+ degrees celsius and cold wont exist for a couple of months.

I can see I'm going to have trouble with this, because I haven't been very poety for a long time. Oh well, at least I'm trying. Maybe this will help me get back in the swing of things.

(Have I bored you with my artist's comment yet? Hehe.)

This is so hard.

I'm so far behind.

I'm trying to catch up.

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:iconlaurence55:
`Laurence55 Jan 31, 2009, 9:41:56 PM
This piece has a sense of "immediacy" that I enjoy greatly. Beautifully done!
:iconpeterdawes:
=peterdawes Jan 31, 2009, 10:03:45 PM
i agree. a tension to that imagery. nicely done.

--
:blackrose: immortal poet, occasional storyteller

"... forever yours, nocturnal me..."
:icondainbrammage:
*DainBrammage Jan 31, 2009, 10:10:28 PM
That is a cool twist and if your think about it, it is not a twist at all. Well, not the Americans think anyway, to us your winter is warm. Still winter though, we are self-righteous and indignant.

Oh wait, Bush is out, Obama in, time to stop the false bravado.

Love the haiku, you will probably be righting more and more every-passing-day.

Love,

db

--
I look older than I act.
:iconsingsorrow:
~singsorrow Jan 31, 2009, 10:14:43 PM
Thank you. :) I'm hoping the WriMo will give me the kick start I need to get back into writing again. And yeah, I've only seen snow once in my life and I had to travel to see it, so our winter is most likely warmer than that of America.
:iconiscariot-priest:
`Iscariot-Priest Jan 31, 2009, 10:30:09 PM
Becareful of enjambment, though it creates a pause, that's all it is.
Gramatically, the haiku suggest the summer fires are cutting the power, rather than the temperature rising as a result of both of these phenomena.
Unless, you know, that's what you were shooting for.

--
“Now me lay down to sleep.
Mow da zeebas down like sheep.
Give dem to me nice and dead.
Me no happy ‘til me fed.”
-Bedtime prayer of crocs, Pearls Before Swine
:iconsingsorrow:
~singsorrow Jan 31, 2009, 10:38:02 PM
Lol, that kind of was what I was shooting for. I saw on the news that in Melbourne I think, fires have cut off power to some parts, making it even hotter because residents don't have access to air conditioning in their homes. I used that as inspiration.

Thanks for the comment. :)
:iconiscariot-priest:
`Iscariot-Priest Jan 31, 2009, 10:41:58 PM
You're welcome.
And you're spot on with the description then.

--
“Now me lay down to sleep.
Mow da zeebas down like sheep.
Give dem to me nice and dead.
Me no happy ‘til me fed.”
-Bedtime prayer of crocs, Pearls Before Swine
:iconk-sajid:
~K-Sajid Jan 31, 2009, 11:28:07 PM
Great description, and an excellent start to the month! Good luck =)

And, it's quite unbearably hot here too.

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