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Cigarette smoke
is a breath of fresh air

in the city where
plants, processing the pollution
fall into a premature
autumn.

And there's black tar in the bay:
fish rotting on the waves
are picturesque
in the city.
©2008-2009 ~singsorrow
:iconsingsorrow:

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Developed from a poem I wrote for the HaikuWriMo last year.

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:icondamirsoull:
At first, I had to read the poem over and over, not because I had a misunderstanding of what you were trying to convey, I was just shocked at exactly what you did write!

Yes, the pollutants that are deposited into the air by common things that one one ever thinks about in mainstream society create a tapestry of what the Earth is becoming: nothing but very ugly. The way you wrote this was quite impressive!

Now a bad thing can be so good to one being, yet so horrid to something else entirely. But that is like life, is it not?

Wonderful.. I cannot wait to see more of your works!

--D. Soull

--
Alas, the heavens meet again,
You the dark, and I, the light.
For DAMIR means "to give peace", and I
Shall guide you through dark nights.
:iconsingsorrow:
Thank you very much for the comment. :) This was inspired by a school trip where I went to Sydney and was shocked - there were more planes in the sky than stars, more smog than clouds and more sirens than birds. It horrified me and made me glad that I live somewhere where at least the sky is blue.

Hopefully I'll be writing more now - it feels like my 'block' is lifting and I can write decent again.

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